Is my poem good or bad? What can I fix?

Your poetry is okay, but from your style of writing, your short stories are probably better. Remember, not everything has to rhyme. A poem actually sounds better when not every single stanza rhymes. Try expanding your horizons-write a poem that doesn't rhyme at all, or perhaps a chain poem. (if you don't know what that is, you take a random thing, let's say, clock, and build a poem from there, by simply writing the first thing that comes to mind.) Of course, you have the potential to be published-everyone, within themselves, if the desire is strong enough, has the power to succeed. :-)